Wednesday, June 08, 2005

Rudy's girl

Yeah, I knew there was another one in me. Again, a quick spell check but no revisions so far.I am soliciting suggestions for line #18 since I am not real sure about it And also line #21. I love what it says, I'm just not sure there isn't a smoother way to say it. If you wanna help, go for it. If you just wanna read it, go for it. It ain't terrible as it is.


Virchow's Daughter (How'd You Get So Mean?) 9Jun05


Sometimes I wonder who you think you are?
It's a question I've been asking more and more.
Don't need no lover acts so damn bizarre.

Are you wearing shoes that's too small for your feet?
'Cause there's something going on I do believe.
So are you killin' time or only killin' me?

Virchow's daughter, how'd you get so mean?
Virchow's daughter, like to make me scream.
Downtown daughter, torn from a magazine.

Yeah, I laid you down in flowers dark and red.
You think I don't, but I remember what you said.
It ain't a matter of time, it's a matter of pride instead.

I was alone when I met you so I know good company.
And giving a damn, little girl, is a two way street.
So I guess either hit the road or talk nice to me.

Virchow's daughter, how'd you get so mean?
Virchow's daughter, like to make me scream.
Downtown daughter, why ya gotta make a scene?

I do like the way you taste when we kiss and all.
So hot in the shadows, your back up against the wall.
I'll come if you ask, but not because you call.

Virchow's daughter, how'd you get so mean?
Virchow's daughter, like to make me scream.
The pain's the same but the pleasure's killin' me

Ed
Yokosuka

5 comments:

Blogger Gun Trash said...

Virchow's daughter, how'd you get so mean?
Virchow's daughter, like to make me scream.
Downtown daughter, why such a scene?

I do like the way you taste when we kiss and all.
So hot in the shadows, your back up against the wall.
I'll come if you ask, but it'll be strictly my call.

9:33 PM  
Blogger Ramblin' Ed said...

I played with "why you make such a scene" early on. I think I may just go back to it.

Thanks for being interactive.
Ed

9:47 PM  
Blogger Ramblin' Ed said...

Aw screw it. I changed it. You were right. Thanks, Gunner.

9:52 PM  
Blogger Red Queen said...

I like line 21 and I really like the poem. Muse done good again.

10:33 PM  
Blogger Ramblin' Ed said...

I do to. And that, sk, is why you'll always be my favorite.

Big grin.
Ed

10:59 PM  

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